Friday, 2 October 2009

Avril the Yawnosaur Script v6

Well, our group got a solid critique last night. So that prompted a revised script that is now being reviewed. This version is dripping with symbolism and the father's work/life balance struggle. The full thing is now just over 4 pages and thus can be well under 5 mins unless we take our time in places which is also good. If this gets lotsa thumbs-up then I will try and get some amount of storyboarding done. There is still scope for adding in more of the story narrative from v4 and v5 if we need it.


Avril the Yawnosaur (v6)

By

Graham Hannah
(With Kylie, Olivia and Ying)




INT.WIRK_FRONT_ROOM

MID FROM INSIDE OF FRONT DOOR AT NIGHT

Darren Wirk enters from outside in business suit, carrying
folders and papers while talking on his mobile phone. He
dumps a pile on cabinet beside door.

DARREN
(frustrated)
Ok, ok, I’ll be back in soon then

Darren looks at watch


OPENING TITLE

GOKY Pictures

Avril the Yawnosaur


INT.AVRILS_BEDROOM

WIDE: ESTABLISHING SHOT OF BED AND DOORWAY

Darren Entering, Avril bringing up her bedside light slowly.

AVRIL
Daddy, you’re back.

DAD
Hi Little one, are you still awake?

Dad moving to the bed.

AVRIL
I couldn’t sleep

Dad sits on the edge of the bed, shifty a fluffy toy

CUTTING NOW BETWEEN TWO CHARACTERS MID AND CLOSE-UP

AVRIL
Can you tell me a story?

DAD
really??

AVRIL
please, the Yawnosaur one.



(CONTINUED)


CONTINUED: 2.



DAD
(smiling)
ah, ok then.

Avril nestles down and Dad tells the story with facial
animation, actions (sound effects are layered on as effects)

As the story is told, cartoon-like images of the creatures
appear and move about on the walls of the room - showing
Avril’s imagination playing out there.

DARREN
Lets see, on this very night,
little Avril the Yawnosaur just
couldn’t get to sleep. There were
lots wierd noises in the jungle
made by an equally amazing array of
creatures. But it was the
Pteranoscreech swooping and
squeeling high above the jungle
canopy that kept her awake.

She knew that Pteranoscreeches
learned to talk to each other over
vast distances by scraping their
claws on blackrocks. By the sound
of it, this one had done lots of
practice.

Avril knew that yawning should help
her. She always felt she had a
talent for it, but just couldn’t
ever get it right in class.

But, she gave yawning a try

YAAWN

Avril joins in for each yawn automatically.

DARREN
As she suspected, nothing changed.
She wasnt any closer to sleeping.

This time she closed her eyes,
looked into her heart and did a
huge yawn.

YAAAAAWN

For a moment things seemed the
same, but then Avril heard the
sound of the gigantic hairy
(MORE)
(CONTINUED)


CONTINUED: 3.



DARREN (cont’d)
stompadon nestling down to sleep,
no more stomping.

Then the strange popping noises
from high up the trees stopped as
well. The Poposaurususes must have
gone to sleep.

Then, just when things seemed
peaceful, the jungle was split by
that horrid screech. How all the
other creatures could sleep at all,
Avril didnt kn...

Darren’s phone vibrates, ringing softly. Avril looks
deflated and the cartoon imagery fades. Darren looks at his
pocket, cant face his daughter ... long pause (quiet but
screechy audio) ... he breathes hard ... looks up resigned
but silences his phone without even looking at it.

Avril smiles and the cartoons return.

DARREN
Soooo, Avril still couldnt sleep,
but she had somehow found a new
inner strength. The Pteranoscreech
was far far away, so she gave a
wriggle and let out the biggest
yawn the jungle would ever see.

YAAAAAAAAAAAAWN

She was exhausted now, with her
head on her mossy pillow she
listened for the sound of the
Pteranoscreech - feeling sleepier
and sleepier.

Avril looking contented - closing eyes, Dad talking more
quietly.

DAD
The jungle was now quiet, no more
stomps, pops or screeching could be
heard and little Avril dreamed of
yawning, lots of yawning.

Dad slides a loose hair across Avril’s forehead

DAD
(whispering)
sweet dreams my little creature.




4.



CREDITS

FADE AWAY (BACKING MUSIC CONTINUES)

CLOSE UP: WASTE-PAPER BIN WITH DARRENS PHONE IN IT.

CREDITS ROLL PAST WITH BIN IN SHOT


INT.AVRILS_BEDROOM

The cartoon Pteranoscreech plummets to the ground with a
thud, still sleeping soundly :-)

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