Avril the Yawnosaur (v6)
(With Kylie, Olivia and Ying)
MID FROM INSIDE OF FRONT DOOR AT NIGHT
Darren Wirk enters from outside in business suit, carrying
folders and papers while talking on his mobile phone. He
dumps a pile on cabinet beside door.
Ok, ok, I’ll be back in soon then
Darren looks at watch
Avril the Yawnosaur
WIDE: ESTABLISHING SHOT OF BED AND DOORWAY
Darren Entering, Avril bringing up her bedside light slowly.
Daddy, you’re back.
Hi Little one, are you still awake?
Dad moving to the bed.
I couldn’t sleep
Dad sits on the edge of the bed, shifty a fluffy toy
CUTTING NOW BETWEEN TWO CHARACTERS MID AND CLOSE-UP
Can you tell me a story?
please, the Yawnosaur one.
ah, ok then.
Avril nestles down and Dad tells the story with facial
animation, actions (sound effects are layered on as effects)
As the story is told, cartoon-like images of the creatures
appear and move about on the walls of the room - showing
Avril’s imagination playing out there.
Lets see, on this very night,
little Avril the Yawnosaur just
couldn’t get to sleep. There were
lots wierd noises in the jungle
made by an equally amazing array of
creatures. But it was the
Pteranoscreech swooping and
squeeling high above the jungle
canopy that kept her awake.
She knew that Pteranoscreeches
learned to talk to each other over
vast distances by scraping their
claws on blackrocks. By the sound
of it, this one had done lots of
Avril knew that yawning should help
her. She always felt she had a
talent for it, but just couldn’t
ever get it right in class.
But, she gave yawning a try
Avril joins in for each yawn automatically.
As she suspected, nothing changed.
She wasnt any closer to sleeping.
This time she closed her eyes,
looked into her heart and did a
For a moment things seemed the
same, but then Avril heard the
sound of the gigantic hairy
stompadon nestling down to sleep,
no more stomping.
Then the strange popping noises
from high up the trees stopped as
well. The Poposaurususes must have
gone to sleep.
Then, just when things seemed
peaceful, the jungle was split by
that horrid screech. How all the
other creatures could sleep at all,
Avril didnt kn...
Darren’s phone vibrates, ringing softly. Avril looks
deflated and the cartoon imagery fades. Darren looks at his
pocket, cant face his daughter ... long pause (quiet but
screechy audio) ... he breathes hard ... looks up resigned
but silences his phone without even looking at it.
Avril smiles and the cartoons return.
Soooo, Avril still couldnt sleep,
but she had somehow found a new
inner strength. The Pteranoscreech
was far far away, so she gave a
wriggle and let out the biggest
yawn the jungle would ever see.
She was exhausted now, with her
head on her mossy pillow she
listened for the sound of the
Pteranoscreech - feeling sleepier
Avril looking contented - closing eyes, Dad talking more
The jungle was now quiet, no more
stomps, pops or screeching could be
heard and little Avril dreamed of
yawning, lots of yawning.
Dad slides a loose hair across Avril’s forehead
sweet dreams my little creature.
FADE AWAY (BACKING MUSIC CONTINUES)
CLOSE UP: WASTE-PAPER BIN WITH DARRENS PHONE IN IT.
CREDITS ROLL PAST WITH BIN IN SHOT
The cartoon Pteranoscreech plummets to the ground with a
thud, still sleeping soundly :-)
Friday, 2 October 2009
Avril the Yawnosaur Script v6
Well, our group got a solid critique last night. So that prompted a revised script that is now being reviewed. This version is dripping with symbolism and the father's work/life balance struggle. The full thing is now just over 4 pages and thus can be well under 5 mins unless we take our time in places which is also good. If this gets lotsa thumbs-up then I will try and get some amount of storyboarding done. There is still scope for adding in more of the story narrative from v4 and v5 if we need it.